Demons of my past

I sat there before the council of monster hunters facing certain death for helping a demon.

5 days earlier…


        “Omg there he is!” Witney screams. Why is everyone obsessed with the new kid? The doors open and there he is.  He had something in his hand but as I turned around it changed shape. Our eyes met and he ran. He turns around to look at me. His eyes widen with shock as he trips and falls. I look around to see if there is anyone around, looking at him I realize he’s grinning. Seriously?  Then he speaks, breaking my heart. He is my childhood bff Logan.

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  1. Interesting story but when you wrote, “Omg there he is!” Witney screams. It should be screamed and I don't know if your allowed to do stuff like OMG. I also don't really get it because your first paragraph has something to do with monster hunters and then your 2nd paragraph has to do with something completely different. Childhood bffs. I don't see how you ended up in front of a monster hunter council? Was Logan a demon?
    Maybe it's just me.

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  2. Great story but I think that where you wrote "He turns around to look at me. His eyes widen with shock as he trips and falls..." Think that you should have said that he turned ( not turns ) and that he tripped ( not trips ) and fell ( not falls ). You should do this because in the begginging of your story it started off with monster hunters, but then it switched to five days earlier and if its five days earlier it should have tripped and fell and turned because it was not happening at present time. Other than that, its a great story!

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